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    1. I apologize, I posted it before I could finish! Anyway, Nicole, first off I think it's going to be super cool to see your storybook come to life! I like Game of Thrones and if you're caught up with the show, you definitely know that there's room for improvement. That's where I can see your storybook coming into play. That said, the only possible advice I have is just double checking some of your sentences as there are words I think you forgot to delete! Likewise, maybe give a little blurb at the end about why you specifically chose those characters? Is it because they're some of the most popular characters in the show or just the diversity in personalities? Are they going to be the focus of your stories to come or were they simply examples from the show? Other then that, it looks great and I can't wait to read your first story!

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  2. Hi Nicole! I think your idea for retelling Aesop's fables with GOT characters is very clever. I like the juxtaposition that these two worlds provide - while Aesop's fables are often read to children, Game of Thrones is much more geared towards adults, etc. I think it will give you a fun excuse to make Aesop's fables more exciting and gritty. I think most people these days are at least somewhat familiar with GOT, and so it will be entertaining to read about these characters in new situations. That being said, you can't assume that all of your readers will be familiar with Westeros and its litany of characters. I think it's smart that you included a little character-index in your introduction. Just be sure to keep that in mind as you write your stories, and to not hinge the meaning of a fable on a reference that many readers may not catch. I would be sure to carefully proofread your stories as well. Overall, everything looks great - I'm looking forward to seeing how the rest of your project unfolds!

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  3. Hey Nicole, this storybook sounds super cool! Combining a modern mythology with older fables seems like a really cool combination. I have not watched or read anything about Game of Thrones, and I think many in class may not have either, so I would keep that in mind as you continue to write your stories and connect everything together. Maybe having extra information in the author's note about the characters would be useful in getting everyone up to speed. Also, I was curious about whether you were going to create your own characters to add to the Game of Thrones world, or if you were going to tell the stories through the existing characters you mention in the introduction. If you are going to add some poem components into your stories, I think that would be really cool. I am looking forward to see where you take this! Good luck!

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  4. Hi Nicole, I think that it is so cool seeing you combine game of thrones with this mythology class. I loved your story about Cersei's share and I was surprised how realistic it actually sounded like something that she would have done. I think that it is awesome that you are combing modern mythology from this show and the story of a selfish animal that didn't share anything. You did a fantastic job giving life to the characters while staying true to the source material I think if someone did not know who these people were they would get a good sense and if they were to read this before watching the show I think that they would enjoy your story and the show more because of it. I really liked the look and the design of your website and it was really cool that you got to use imagery from the game of thrones universe because those images are able to invoke such a fond memory in me.

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  5. Nicole,

    First and foremost, being a big GOT fan myself, I understood exactly what the scene you are talking about! The aspect of this storybook that I enjoy most would definitely be how you use the stories that were already created in the series themselves and mend it in a way that fits the narrative that you were trying to retell. That being said, the "Lion's Share" was also one of my favorite stories that I read so far, and I also used it as part of my weekly stories! I will say that the descriptions that you incorporated into the story is impeccable, and it seems like something straight from the books themselves. Something that I think would make the story better would be if you mentioned the personality of the characters themselves. From a fan such as I, I would know that Cersei would be the exact type of person to be selfish like that. The same also goes for the stereotypical depiction of a lion in folktales. However, if you mentioned something about how it would be likely that the character would do such a thing. I look forward to reading more from you!

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  6. Hi Nicole,
    I am in the beginning of the Game of Thrones series and your guide definitely helped fill in the blanks I may have missed between seasons. I do think the idea of telling Aesop's fables in Game of Thrones world of Westeros is unique and intriguing. However, a little more explanation as to why you chose this topic and/ or what stories you will be telling. I know from the title that you are using Aesop's fables, but a light description of what Aesop's fables are may assist readers who potentially do not know. Overall your introduction is very well written and grammatically correct. If you wanted to edit or spruce up the page a bit, a background image in the textbox is a possibility, or even playing around with indention and bullet points. Again, very well done and very creative. I am very excited to continue reading this.

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  7. Hi Nicole,
    Wow! I loved getting to look at your website and seeing Game of Thrones all over your story book. I am a huge fan of Game of Thrones so I enjoyed seeing your pictures and reading your story. I have two more seasons left for Game of Thrones and I can't wait to finish them. Where did your inspiration or love of Game of Thrones come from? I always enjoy getting to hear why you picked a certain picture or story to recreate. I read Cersei's Share, and WOW! I loved it. You did a great job with all of your spelling and the flow of your story. I also thought you did a great job with the structure of your story. I was engaged the whole time, which is really hard to do as a writer. Great job. I loved reading your story.

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  8. Hi, Nicole! A fellow GoT fan, I see. Who is your favorite character? I really think it's creative how you've taken beloved characters and set the stage to write stories about them and the lessons we can learn from their behavior. GoT has a lot of flawed characters just perfect for some Aesop's tales, as you've shown with Cersei taking everything for herself. It shows you know the characters and just where they'd fit as you rewrite beloved tales in your own voice. There were some really minor grammatical errors like the first paragraph with "... as they Lannisters were ..." which should just be a swap of 'they' with 'the,' and also the part where Cersei spoke -- "You may," Answered Cersei. The word 'answered' doesn't have to be capitalized after a comma. But these are really small things. I love your first story and I hope to see Dany (she's my favorite) in the future! Wonderful work.

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  9. Hi Nicole!
    As a huge Game of Thrones lover, I was super excited about your story! I loved how accurate it was written, like how the siblings all acted. (Although I think Jamie would've argued he was the favorite). I'm curious to know what the other stories will look like and what characters you will include? Will you keep Cersei, Jamie, and Tyrion in all the stories or change it up? I'd love if you brought in Jon Snow! I'm also super curious about how Tywin died in your story. He clearly dies differently than in the show so I'd love to read more details! Also, you left us on a cliffhanger with Tyrion almost promising more trouble so I can’t want to read about that! Anyway, there was one typo I saw in the last sentence of the story. "...as Tyrion silently filed with anger against his sister..." I think you meant to say filled instead of filed!

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  10. Hi Nicole,
    I am from the other class and I came over to check some of the other stories from this class. I am a Game of Thrones lover so when I saw that you could count me in. I could tell you really knew the GoT story because the way you described each character and their actions was spot on. Cersei was acting how she typically would in all the GoT episodes. I think you started a good story here, and I hope there is more to come. I would be interested to see what other characters you could bring in and make them relate to the GoT story line, while also including some folk tale in there as well. I had a great time looking at this story, and I hope that you have a good semester.
    Philip Crowley

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  11. Hey Nicole! I too love Game of Thrones (except the last season because WHY WAS JON SNOW A BASTARD IF IT DIDN'T EVEN MATTER AND WHY WAS DAENERYS' CHARACTER COMPLETELY TARNISHED BY HER CRUELTY but I digress) so I was so thrilled to read your storybook! I think the way you did introductions to the characters was completely necessary and you did it well. In addition, I love the subtle way you worked the original myth into the story. I had never read The Lion's Share, but after reading the author's note I think I understood where it came into play. I truly felt as if this could have been the first or second episode of the entire series, so good job on staying true to the characters! One thing I will point out is that the line that says "the fourth part contained nothing but his favorite coat..." is in there twice! Don't worry though, I've definitely made that mistake before. Overall, I really enjoyed your storybook and I hope I get to read the rest! Have a great rest of the semester!

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  12. Nicole, Gam oof Thrones is my favorite show ever! I loved every season of it although I do believe they rushed the ending a bit when they killed off Danaryes but it was still a cultural icon as long as it was on the air. I immediately clicked on on your storybook when I saw it was about Game of Thrones! I like how in your introduction you give us background information on the characters and this really helps the readers understand what is happening in later stories!

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